Applied Nic's patches for Chmmr, the StarBase Commander, Druuge,

Melnorme, and Druuge. (sometimes in modified form)


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sc2/content/comm/chmmr/chmmr.txt

@@ -46,7 +46,7 @@ We are struggling against the Ur-Quan. Can't you help us?
 we cannot be of any assistance now... we are in the middle of the process.
 i will explain
 after we chenjesu and mmrnmhrm were defeated by the ur-quan
-we chose to be encased within a single slave shield on this world
+we chose to be encased in a single slave shield on this world
 as soon as the ur-quan departed, we began the process
 we initiated a synthesis of our two species, our two cultures
 one crystalline, the other purely mechanical
@@ -62,7 +62,7 @@ But why can't you help us now?!
 
 #(LONG_TIME)	chmmr006.ogg
 the complete synthetic hybridization of the chenjesu and the mmrnmhrm species
-will require approximately thirty five of your earth years
+will require approximately thirty-five of your earth years
 this extended duration is necessary because our synthesis mechanisms
 are dependent exclusively on the light of our sun for energy.
 
@@ -105,8 +105,8 @@ its mental power may be useful to help confuse the ur-quan.
 I got this huge bomb-thing from a race called the Utwig. Is it really a weapon?
 
 #(ABOUT_BOMB)	chmmr011.ogg
-the device you speak of is a huge matter-antimatter bomb... if you had activated it
+the device you speak of is a huge matter-antimatter bomb
-the weapon would have annihilated your ship and everything else within five hundred kilometers
+if you had activated it, the weapon would have annihilated your ship and everything else within five hundred kilometers
 the destructive power of this weapon makes it suitable for the most important task you will ever undertake
 the neutralization of the sa-matra, the ur-quan's nearly invincible battle platform.
 
@@ -193,7 +193,7 @@ THIS MUST BE YOUR PRIORITY. THIS MUST BE YOUR EVENTUAL GOAL.
 WE KNOW WHAT IS NECESSARY TO ACHIEVE THIS END
 BUT FIRST WE MUST KNOW WHAT YOU HAVE ALREADY LEARNED
 SO WE WILL SCAN THE DATABANKS AND LOGS ABOARD YOUR SHIP.
-THERE
+THERE.
 THE PROCESS IS COMPLETE. NOW WE CAN DISCUSS WHAT YOU MUST DO.
 
 #(YOU_KNOW_SAMATRA)	chmmr020.ogg
@@ -331,8 +331,8 @@ ONE: THE LOCATION OF THE SA-MATRA CAN BE CONFINED TO THE STARS IN THE CRATERIS C
 SEEK THE VEHICLE IN THIS REGION.
 TWO: BECAUSE THE UR-QUAN LOST SO MANY SHIPS WHEN THE SHOFIXTI CAUSED THEIR OWN SUN TO FLARE
 THE KOHR-AH'S FORCES ARE GROSSLY SUPERIOR TO THE UR-QUAN.
-IF THE WAR IS NOT OVER BETWEEN THE UR-QUAN AND THE KOHR-AH, IT SHALL BE SOON
+IF THE WAR IS NOT OVER BETWEEN THE UR-QUAN AND THE KOHR-AH, IT SHALL BE SOON, WITH THE KOHR-AH VICTORIOUS.
-WITH THE KOHR-AH VICTORIOUS. WHEN THIS HAPPENS THE KOHR-AH WILL MOVE THROUGH SPACE
+WHEN THIS HAPPENS THE KOHR-AH WILL MOVE THROUGH SPACE
 DESTROYING ALL INTELLIGENT RACES ONE BY ONE UNTIL NONE REMAIN.
 YOU MUST NOT BE DISTRACTED! THE SA-MATRA IS THE KEY TO THEIR DOMINANCE!
 DESTROY THEIR SACRED TROPHY, AND UNITED WITH OUR ALLIES, WE CAN DEFEAT THEIR STAR FLEET.

sc2/content/comm/comandr/comandr.txt

@@ -4,7 +4,6 @@ Hurry back, Captain.
 #(GIVE_FUEL) coman001.ogg
 We do have a small amount of Starship fuel which is of no use to our power systems.
 We will now transport 5 units to your vessel.
-This should be sufficient for one trip to the surface of Mercury.
 
 #(GIVE_FUEL_AGAIN) coman002.ogg
 We are almost out of fuel now, but we do have a BIT more.
@@ -27,7 +26,7 @@ Did you find any radioactive elements for our power cores?
 #(HERE_IS_ANOTHER_LANDER) coman005.ogg
 What!!!
 You lost another lander!?
-We shall build another, but DON'T LOSE THIS ONE, OKAY!
+We'll build another, but DON'T LOSE THIS ONE, OKAY!
 
 #(THE_WHAT_FROM_WHERE) coman006.ogg
 The starship what?
@@ -37,17 +36,17 @@ but, we have no space vessels of our own
 and the shield prevents us from contacting Earth
 so we are totally dependent on the Ur-Quan supply vessels for everything we need up here.
 We know there is a Hierarchy base on the surface of the moon, but we can't contact them.
-The Ur-Quan were supposed to resupply this base at regular, five year intervals
+The Ur-Quan were supposed to resupply the base at regular, five year intervals
 but we haven't received anything in almost eight years!
 What we don't recycle we can usually synthesize
-but to do so, we need replacement radioactives for our generators' energy cores.
+but to do so, we need replacement radioactives for our generator energy cores.
 If you could bring us some radioactive elements, we can fabricate the cores ourselves.
 Are you willing to help us!?
 
 #(ABOUT_TIME) coman007.ogg
 Well, it's about damn time!
 In the Fealty agreement the Ur-Quan promised that this station would be resupplied
-at least every five years, and its been over eight since we last saw you!
+at least every five years, and its been over eight since we saw you!
 If you had arrived a few weeks later, there wouldn't have been anyone alive on this station
 never mind...just begin your transfer of materials immediately, starting with the radioactives.
 
@@ -55,16 +54,16 @@ never mind...just begin your transfer of materials immediately, starting with th
 I'm sorry, Captain, your message was garbled. Our receivers have very little power.
 
 #(MESSAGE_GARBLED_2) coman009.ogg
-I couldn't quite make that out, Captain. Could you please repeat?
+I couldn't quite make it out, Captain. Could you please repeat?
 
 #(HERE_IS_A_NEW_LANDER) coman010.ogg
 Manufacturing a new lander for you will use most of what little resources we have left
 but I suppose we have no choice.
-We will transport the new lander to your vehicle immediately.
+We will transport the new lander vehicle immediately.
 
 #(THIS_MAY_SEEM_SILLY) coman011.ogg
 By the way Captain, I think we need a name for this new alliance we're going to forge.
-Since this was your idea, it's only fair that you have the honor of naming it.
+And since it was your idea, it's only fair that you get the honor of naming it.
 So, what will it be?
 
 #(OK_THE_NAFS) coman012.ogg
@@ -98,7 +97,7 @@ WHAT!
 What kind of idiot sent you out here without replacements for our energy cores!?
 It's amazing that we've kept the generators online for as long as we have!
 Look, you had better get those radioactives right away
-or all the other supplies are pretty damn pointless, since we'll be too dead to use them!
+or all the other supplies are pretty damn pointless, since we'll all be too dead to use them!
 
 #(DONT_KNOW_WHO_YOU_ARE) coman019.ogg
 Look, I don't know who you are or why you're here
@@ -111,7 +110,7 @@ please get some and bring them back here before it's too late.
 
 #(THATS_IMPOSSIBLE) coman020.ogg
 Star Control science mission, eh?
-Captain, I served as a Star Control officer during the war, aboard several cruisers on the Coreward Front
+Captain, I served as a Star Control officer during the war, aboard several cruisers in the Coreward Front
 and if there had been any 'scientific mission' to Vela
 I would have heard about it.
 
@@ -122,7 +121,7 @@ Okay, what do you want to know?
 The fastest way to get radioactives in this system would be to land on Mercury
 and scour the surface for deposits of radioactive elements.
 But be careful. Mercury is a pretty inhospitable place!
-Watch out for earthquakes and hotspots.
+Watch out for earthquakes and those high-temperature areas!
 
 #(THANKS_FOR_HELPING) coman023.ogg
 Thanks! I'll make sure to mention this the next time I talk with our masters
@@ -131,7 +130,7 @@ I'm sure they will reward you.
 #(STARBASE_IS) coman024.ogg
 Ur-Quan slave law requires that we maintain an orbital space platform
 to assist Hierarchy vessels which are in need of repairs or fuel.
-Since the shield around Earth cuts us off completely from the planet
+Since the shield around the Earth cuts us off completely from the planet
 we are dependent on Ur-Quan resupply ships for our non-renewable resources.
 The resupply vessels are supposed to arrive every five years
 at which time the Ur-Quan somehow penetrate the shield and exchange those of us up here
@@ -142,7 +141,7 @@ When the Alliance lost the war, the Ur-Quan gave Earth a single choice
 join the Hierarchy as Battle Thralls and fight for the Ur-Quan to enslave other sentient species
 or become `fallow' slaves, and be forever imprisoned on a single world
 encased in an impenetrable energy shield here on Earth.
-We chose not to fight for the Ur-Quan.
+We choose not to fight for the Ur-Quan.
 
 #(URQUAN_LEFT) coman026.ogg
 Soon after Earth accepted the Ur-Quan's Oath of Fealty, they departed,
@@ -153,24 +152,23 @@ Ahh...fight the Ur-Quan! Win back our freedom!
 I remember having such thoughts myself...once, a long time ago.
 But that was in the first years after the defeat, when it was still terrifying to look up
 and see the bloody glow of the pulsating slave shield overhead.
-Through day and night we gazed up at that impenetrable wall
+Through day and night we gazed up at the impenetrable wall
 as though the sheer power of our hatred would pull it down.
-But over the years, I spent so much of my time struggling --
+But over the years, I spent so much of my time struggling
--- down on the surface under the shield and then later up here, trying to keep this station alive --
+down on the surface under the shield and then later up here, trying to keep this station alive
--- that I'd forgotten what it means to be free... to hate our Ur-Quan Masters! 
+that I'd forgotten what it means to be free... to hate our Ur-Quan Masters! 
 And now, here you are, in an alien ship of unknown power,
 offering me your assistance to fight against the Hierarchy again, after all these years.
-Captain
+Captain, your offer is intriguing.
-your offer is intriguing.
 It's tempting to think that with your advanced Precursor technology
 we can somehow crack Earth's slave shield
 and reassemble the Alliance to attack the Hierarchy, and THIS time win the damn war!
 But... consider the consequences if we should fail.
-The Ur-Quan won't just punish us here at this station.
+The Ur-Quan won't just punish us here on the station.
 They will exact a gruesome retribution on the surface below as well.
 Before I commit this station to helping you attack the Ur-Quan
 and accepting the risk of annihilation if we are defeated
-I have to be sure that you and your ship have what it takes to oppose the Hierarchy.
+I have to make sure that you and your ship have what it takes to oppose the Hierarchy.
 I'll make you a deal.
 If you can eliminate the alien base on the moon, and get rid of that threat, at least
 I will seriously consider your offer.
@@ -178,15 +176,15 @@ I will seriously consider your offer.
 #(ACKNOWLEDGE_SECRET) coman028.ogg
 Hmmm... you know, come to think of it
 there were some rumors that Corridor Nine, the special operations division of Star Control
-was directing some hush-hush operation out near Androsynth space.
+was directing some hush-hush operation near Androsynth space.
-The Vela star system... yes, that would be in the right direction
+The Vela star system... yes, that would be the right direction
-So, Captain... if what you say is true
+So, Captain... if you say it's true
 how do you explain that huge, alien starship you're flying
 and why are you here? What do you want from us?
 
 #(ABOUT_BASE) coman029.ogg
 After the Ur-Quan erected the slave shield around Earth, and established this space station
-they decided to leave a contingent of combat ships close to Earth
+they decided to leave a contingent of combat ships close to the Earth
 to keep watch on our planet and confirm that we were obeying the Ur-Quan slave laws.
 I'm certain they're still out there on the surface of the moon
 because we can pick up a constant stream of alien broadcasts.
@@ -205,19 +203,18 @@ Captain, listen closely!
 Long range sensors show a ship closing on this station, fast!
 Our computer identifies it as Ilwrath, Avenger-class.
 I think you've got a fight on your hands, Captain.
-Your best bet is to wait until it's at point bl-nk r-nge
+Your best bet is to wait until you have point bl-nk r-nge
 C-pt-in! It's ja-min- ou- s-gn-l!...
 
 #(VERY_IMPRESSIVE) coman033.ogg
 What a beautiful sight, Captain!
 I haven't seen an Avenger blown away like that since the Battle in Draco.
-I guess you've shown that you can handle yourself in a battle, Captain
+I guess you've shown that you can handle yourself in battle, Captain
 so my last reservation about helping you has been dissolved.
-I will commit this station to helping you free Earth and defeat the Ur-Quan.
+I will commit this station to helping free Earth and defeat the Ur-Quan.
 We may get our atoms rearranged in the process, but by God, Captain, we're going to try!
-So
+So, the obvious first step is to get your Precursor equipment and software over here
-the obvious first step is to get your Precursor equipment and software over here
+so that we can make it work with our ship repair fabricators.
-where we can make it work with our ship repair fabricators.
 But then what, Captain?
 
 #(IT_WAS_ABANDONED) coman034.ogg
@@ -251,26 +248,26 @@ What a relief!
 If that probe gets back to the Ur-Quan, Captain, we are BOTH in deep trouble!
 
 #(ABOUT_BASE_AGAIN) coman042.ogg
-As I said before, after the Ur-Quan erected the slave shield around Earth and assembled this space station
+As I said before, after the Ur-Quan erected the slave shield around the Earth and assembled this space station
 they decided to leave a contingent of Spathi and Ilwrath ships stationed on the moon.
 We have looked at the moonbase through our telescopes and can confirm that there is still substantial activity down there
-but we have never been able to make contact with the base using either the HyperWave `Caster
+but we have never been able to make contact with the base using either HyperWave `Caster
 or traditional radio signals.
 
 #(COOK_BUTTS) coman043.ogg
 Ha-ha.. yes, Captain, we'll do just that!
 
 #(OVERTHROW_ALIENS) coman044.ogg
-If you feel this is necessary Captain, I understand.
+If you feel it's necessary Captain, I understand.
 
 #(KILL_MONSTERS) coman045.ogg
 A sensible plan, Captain.  Let's get to work.
 
 #(GOOD_LUCK_AGAIN) coman046.ogg
-Good luck.
+Hurry back, Captain.
 
 #(STARBASE_WILL_BE_READY) coman047.ogg
-Now Captain, I expect the configuration process for this starbase
+Now Captain, I expect the configuration process for the starbase
 to take at least 2 weeks, so let's get to work...
 
 #(overthrow_evil_aliens) 

sc2/content/comm/druuge/druuge.txt

@@ -17,8 +17,8 @@ Or prepare to suffer the severe consequences.
 Druuge starship captain. Justify your presence here.
 
 #(GEN_INFO_AT_BOMB_PLANET)	druug003.ogg
-We, the appointed representatives of the Crimson Corporation merely come to obtain
+We, the appointed representatives of the Crimson Corporation 
-the fair and reasonable payment for our goods!
+merely come to obtain the fair and reasonable payment for our goods!
 We travelled to this region of space years ago to sell the useless Ultron device to the Utwig.
 We knew even then of the weapon on the surface below us -- this was to be our price!
 But the Utwig used a clever ploy to cheat us!
@@ -46,7 +46,7 @@ Then they begged to hold the device, just for a moment.
 To close the deal, I permitted this... a grievous mistake!
 The moment the High Proctor touched the Ultron, her body arched
 and her eyes rolled back in her head.
-She began to babble meaningless phrases and howl like a hungry beast.
+She began to babble meaningless phrases and howl like a beast.
 We had expected the Utwig to fall for our Sell, to buy the useless device. But never with such gusto!
 Their self-doubt and lack of clear reason left them vulnerable to our every manipulation.
 But then, the Proctor's body relaxed, and her eyes slowly closed.
@@ -149,7 +149,7 @@ Should you change your mind, we will always be ready to work with you, Captain.
 Gee, isn't this kind of like... slave trading?
 
 #(NO_SLAVE_TRADE)	druug014.ogg
-No, no no, Captain! Slaves have no choice in their destiny, no freedom.
+No, no, no, Captain! Slaves have no choice in their destiny, no freedom.
 We would never accept the permanent assignment of one of your people
 unless we knew that they had granted you the rights to make such a deal.
 
@@ -190,7 +190,7 @@ which we will trade for 100 of your crew.
 
 #(BOUGHT_SHIP)	druug021.ogg
 Good choice. Your fleet swells with power!
-With the purchase of additional Mauler vessels, you would be nigh invincible!
+With the purchase of additional Mauler vessels, you would be nigh-invincible!
 
 #(BOUGHT_FUEL)	druug022.ogg
 The fuel has been transferred to your vehicle.
@@ -270,7 +270,7 @@ had detected our HyperWave emissions, and though still distant
 was inexorably homing in on our central trade world at Zeta Persei.
 We devised a brilliant plan, implemented it perfectly
 and were thus spared gruesome death at the hands of the aliens
-who we later learned called themselves the `Kohr-Ah'.
+who we later learned call themselves the `Kohr-Ah'.
 
 #(GOODBYE_FROM_SPACE)	druug032.ogg
 Until we meet again.
@@ -351,7 +351,7 @@ wish to establish a long-term relationship with an omnipotent and all-knowing de
 which shall mutually benefit both parties, the parties agree to abide by the following terms and commitments
 for the rest of eternity.
 The Worshippers hereby promise to perform faithfully and to the best of their ability
-the following
+the following:
 1. Worshippers shall make regular and sincere obeisance to God, including but not limited to
 prayer, sacrifice, and the building of large structures.
 2. Worshippers shall make every attempt to convert non-believers (hereinafter known as `Them')
@@ -468,7 +468,7 @@ I will purchase the fertile Shofixti adolescents.
 I accept the deal for the Mycon Deep Child eggcase.
 
 #(BOUGHT_CASTER)	druug061.ogg
-I will buy the Hyperwave 'Caster.
+I will buy the HyperWave 'Caster.
 
 #(YOU_GET)	druug062.ogg
 In exchange, you shall receive 
@@ -497,7 +497,7 @@ the agreed-upon number of ships.
 #(DEAL_FOR_LESS_SHIPS)	druug068.ogg
 less than the number of ships I originally offered
 because you have no room for the the full amount in your fleet!
-Unfortunately for you, I'm afraid, but legal I assure you.
+Unfortunate for you, I'm afraid, but legal I assure you.
 
 #(DEAL_FOR_NO_SHIPS)	druug069.ogg
 the number of ships which can be added to your fleet
@@ -508,7 +508,7 @@ With such a fine deal under my belt, perhaps I should take the rest of the day o
 #(FUEL0)	druug070.ogg
 All the fuel your ship can hold.
 We are now hooking up the fuel lines to fill your tanks.
-Hmm.. Ah, yes. The job is done. Now let's see how much was transferred... It was 
+Hmm..
 
 #(FUEL1)
  units of fuel.
@@ -544,7 +544,8 @@ A fine deal, Captain. An excellent bargain... for me!
 Ho-ho-ho! When I offered you all the fuel you could hold, you could have drained every drop I had.
 Cold sweat dripped from my palms as I watched my workers begin the transfer.
 And then it was over... so soon! So gloriously soon!
-I shall be promoted at least three full steps! A new office! A benefits package! Fortune has smiled on me today!
+I shall be promoted at least three full steps! A new office! A benefits package!
+Fortune has smiled on me today!
 I feel so lucky, Captain, that you did not have the forethought to arrive here with a dozen empty tanks.
 Thank you! Thank you! Thank you!
 

sc2/content/comm/melnorm/melnorm.txt

@@ -42,15 +42,13 @@ What are these 'unavoidable factors'?
 
 #(FACTORS_ARE)	melno006.ogg
 First and foremost among these factors
-is our unwillingness to GIVE away information about
+is our unwillingness to GIVE away information
-our history, psychology and mental powers,
+about our history, psychology and mental powers,
 our unique physiology,
 the exact locations of homeworlds,
 or our potentially ominous, long-range plans.
-However,
+However, these important and relevant pieces of information
-these important and relevant pieces of information
+ARE available, for a nominal sum of Credits.
-ARE available
-for a nominal sum of Credits.
 
 #(what_about_universe)
 Do you have any information which might be useful to us?
@@ -113,10 +111,9 @@ I had itchy pods this morning, Captain, and here you are!
 
 #(HELLO_AND_DOWN_TO_BUSINESS_4)	melno015.ogg
 What a coincidence! I was just talking about you with a Keel-Verezy captain. 
-He/she/they expressed great interest in your explorations and struggles against the Ur-Quan
+They expressed great interest in your explorations and struggles against the Ur-Quan
-but, like all Verezy, I'm afraid he/she/they were hesitant to introduce themselves for fear of
+but, like all Verezy, I'm afraid they were hesitant to introduce themselves for fear of
-well
+well, frightening you. 
-frightening you. 
 In any event, it is our pleasure to meet you once again.
 
 #(HELLO_AND_DOWN_TO_BUSINESS_5)	melno016.ogg
@@ -153,8 +150,7 @@ Welcome back, Captain! You are our favorite customer.
 What's my Credit balance, if you please?
 
 #(HELLO_SLIGHTLY_ANGRY_1)	melno022.ogg
-So
+So, the violent one has returned.
-the violent one has returned.
 Have you come back to seek our forgiveness
 or to attack our defenseless vessel once more?
 
@@ -175,8 +171,7 @@ Your question reveals a certain lack of understanding
 about the nature of friendly, inter-species relationships. 
 We shall clarify the situation. 
 If you wish to be friends with someone
-never
+never, EVER
-EVER
 shoot wads of super-heated plasma at them. 
 Is this clear?
 
@@ -190,9 +185,8 @@ They didn't like the climate there
 so they decided to make `just a few minor, climatic adjustments.'
 Their equipment went haywire, they panicked and fled
 and the entire atmosphere was stripped off the planet
-much to the native Algolites sincere
+much to the native Algolites sincere,
-though short-lived
+though short-lived, regret.
-regret.
 
 #(excuse_2)
 Let's just forget our battle ever happened, ok?
@@ -211,8 +205,7 @@ But it would have to be genuine.
 I apologize. I'm sorry. Please forgive me, I beg you.
 
 #(APOLOGY_ACCEPTED) melno029.ogg
-Well
+Well, since you put it so nicely
-since you put it so nicely
 you seem so genuinely repentant
 we'll give you another chance to become trading partners with us.
 But don't ever attack us again
@@ -286,9 +279,7 @@ We have come to help you once more, Captain.
 
 #(RESCUE_AGAIN_4) melno041.ogg
 We MUST stop meeting like this, Captain!
-Ha, ha, ha
+Ha, ha, ha!
-Har, har, har
-snicker
 
 #(RESCUE_AGAIN_5) melno042.ogg
 Out of fuel again, eh, Captain?
@@ -374,20 +365,14 @@ We stand prepared to make reparations for our previous conduct.
 
 #(ONE_LAST_CHANCE)	melno056.ogg
 Hmm
-
+hmm... hmm... hmm.
-hmm
+Oh, very well then.
-
-hmm...hmm...hmm.
-
-Very well then.
 We will give you a single opportunity to compensate us
 for the damages you have inflicted upon our mercantile fleet
 with your unreasonable attacks in the past.
 We will not make this offer a second time.
-
 You will give us all non-essential hardware from your vessel
 immediately!
-
 Do you accept?
 
 #(ok_strip_me)
@@ -430,7 +415,7 @@ it also lets us see our weapon consoles more clearly.
 We have no fear of you, Melnorme!
 
 #(YOU_NOT_STRONG_1) melno062.ogg
-You should.
+Oh, you should.
 Once the Dramya thought they could steal from us.
 You don't see too many Dramya around these days, do you?
 
@@ -475,8 +460,8 @@ We are interested in purchasing certain items, specifically
 biological data on alien life forms
 and the coordinates of certain strange worlds whose radiant energies defy all scanners
 producing a rainbow-like image.
-In exchange, we have many interesting and valuable commodities
+In exchange, we have many interesting and valuable commodities, such as
-such as fuel compatible with your starship's HyperDrive thrusters
+fuel compatible with your starship's HyperDrive thrusters,
 technological specifications, allowing you to build new devices for your ship
 and many important secrets which may help you in your travels.
 To facilitate trade, we translate all your sales into Interstar Credits
@@ -612,7 +597,7 @@ Unfortunately this purchase requires
 
 #(BUY_FUEL_INTRO)	melno085.ogg
 As you know, we carry a large supply of fuel on board which is compatible with your engine system.
-We will be happy to sell this substance to you at a cost of 1 Credit per unit.
+We will be happy to sell this substance to you at a cost of 1 Credit per fuel unit.
 
 #(NO_ROOM_FOR_FUEL)	melno086.ogg
 Your ship's capacity is insufficient to hold that much fuel.
@@ -643,12 +628,11 @@ As you know, in our many centuries of star-trading
 we Melnorme have come to learn much about what happens in our galaxy
 both now and in the ancient past.
 We have also kept records on the diverse alien races in your region of space.
-We will share this crucial knowledge with you for a fee of 75 Credits
+We will share this crucial knowledge with you for a fee of 75 Credits per informative fact.
-per informative fact.
 No refunds.
 
 #(OK_BUY_INFO)	melno088.ogg
-Good!  I wish to SELL information.
+How wonderful, Captain!
 
 #(OK_NO_BUY_INFO)	melno089.ogg
 What else would you like to buy?
@@ -700,7 +684,7 @@ and the general feeling that the priests had made Dogar and Kazon's pronouncemen
 As you know, there are weaknesses in the division between dimensions.
 For example, your vessel uses such weaknesses to enter HyperSpace.
 However, there are other weak spots in the galaxy which lead to yet different dimensions.
-One such portal exists nearby, between the Chrandrasekhar and Columbae constellations.
+One such portal exists nearby, between the Chandrasekhar and Columbae constellations.
 The portal opens only a short time each month starting on the 17th.
 Since we have never entered the portal, we can give no more information on this subject.
 
@@ -728,7 +712,7 @@ of a powerful alien nation called the Utwig.
 The Utwig, the Burvixese explained, were pleasant, sophisticated creatures
 but they were also terminally depressed and often spoke about ending their lives
 by activating a super-weapon, some kind of gigantic bomb
-which they had found on one of their worlds -- Zeta Hyades VIB I think it was.
+which they had found on one of their worlds -- Zeta Hyades VI-B I think it was.
 The Druuge recognized the description of the bomb as a Precursor planeteering tool
 which indeed was an explosive device of unrivaled power, and they set out to make it their own.
 Though the revolting, criminal, insidious Druuge rarely leave their sphere of influence
@@ -751,11 +735,10 @@ and will probably be unwilling to help you fight the Ur-Quan.
 If you wish to gain them as allies, we recommend that you acquire the broken Ultron
 (as if it EVER worked)
 and find some suitable replacement parts.
-Our information indicates that you can find these items in three different places
+Our information indicates that you can find these items in three different places:
 a Rosy Sphere at the Druuge trade world
 an Aqua Helix somewhere in Thraddash space
 and a Clear Spindle, which is currently in the possession of the Pkunk.
- 
 Captain, that was the last current event we have for sale.
 
 #(OK_BUY_ALIEN_RACE_1)	melno099.ogg
@@ -767,20 +750,18 @@ this close proximity to the inter-Ur-Quan war will give them insights into the c
 which will be of great use to you.
 In addition, the Zoq-Fot-Pik met the Chenjesu early on in the war, and are eager to make allies
 who can protect them from their enemies. 
-In case you are interested, the Zoq-Fot-Pik homeworld is at
+In case you are interested, the Zoq-Fot-Pik homeworld is at coordinates 400.0:543.7, planet I.
-coordinates 400.0:543.7, planet I.
 
 #(OK_BUY_ALIEN_RACE_2)	melno100.ogg
 The Ilwrath are presently attacking the Pkunk in the Lacaille and Krueger constellations.
 These beings have slavish devotion to their dark gods Dogar and Kazon
-which in the past few years has been being used against them by the Umgah.
+which in the past few years has been used against them by the Umgah.
 If you need to manipulate the Ilwrath, we suggest you discover the Umgah's technique
 and duplicate it.
 
 #(OK_BUY_ALIEN_RACE_3)	melno101.ogg
 The Pkunk are a mystical off-shoot of the Yehat species
-who left their bird-brothers long ago to found a peaceful enclave
+who left their bird-brothers long ago to found a peaceful enclave in the Krueger and Giclas stars.
-in the Krueger and Giclas stars.
 At the present time, the Pkunk are defending themselves against the Ilwrath
 who have been commanded to attack the happy birds by Dogar and Kazon. 
 The Pkunk may be unwilling to make a formal alliance with you
@@ -802,7 +783,7 @@ I must warn you about some very bad people.
 I assure you, it is!
 The creatures are called the `Druuge' and they are a callous and evil race.
 They care for nothing but profit and personal gain through unfair mercantile exchanges..
-why are you looking at me like that, Captain? It is not appropriate.
+Why are you looking at me like that, Captain? It is not appropriate.
 As I was saying, these wicked creatures will try to sell you commodities at unreasonably low prices.
 Hoy! -- they almost give away fuel! 
 Do not fall for their tricks! There are hidden costs -- secret tariffs!
@@ -821,7 +802,7 @@ until the Gg came under attack by an invading race who you may know as the Kohr-
 The Gg warned the Burvixese that the Kohr-Ah located races by their HyperWave transmissions
 and that they had already discovered the radiations from the Druuge.
 When the Burvixese were kind enough to warn the Druuge that a hostile alien race
-was homing in on their HyperWave's radiations, the Druuge shut down all their transmitters
+was homing in on their HyperWave radiations, the Druuge shut down all their transmitters
 and erected a powerful HyperWave beacon on the surface of the Burvixese moon.
 The Kohr-Ah changed course, attacked the poor Burvixese and sadly, destroyed them all.
 
@@ -840,8 +821,8 @@ on the Chenjesu's homeworld at Procyon.
 We suspect that they are melding their two species to form some kind of new, hybrid race
 a race which may well be powerful enough to destroy the Ur-Quan single-handedly.
 However, by our calculations, this process will take many decades, if not centuries.
-Should you wish to talk to them, we recommend you invest in a HyperWave broadcasting system
+Should you wish to talk to them, we recommend you invest in a
-which is powerful enough to penetrate the shield around their world.
+HyperWave broadcasting system which is powerful enough to penetrate the shield around their world.
 
 #(OK_BUY_ALIEN_RACE_9)	melno107.ogg
 The Mycon are using this time while the Ur-Quan have their attention elsewhere
@@ -862,14 +843,14 @@ who appeared seemingly out of nowhere.
 Actually, we don't know what the Orz did to the Androsynth -- they're just all gone.
 
 #(OK_BUY_ALIEN_RACE_11)	melno109.ogg
-The Ariloulaleelay are a mysterious race of IDF beings
+The Arilou Lalee'lay are a mysterious race of IDF beings
 IDF meaning, Inter-Dimensional Fatigue
-who do not reside in this galaxy, or in fact, anywhere in this universe.
+They do not reside in this galaxy, or in fact, anywhere in this universe.
 While it is true that the Arilou are rarely seen far from the Columbae star group
 they do make regular, secret visits to your world, and have done so for centuries.
 Ever since Earth was slave-shielded, they have focused their attention
 on the humans aboard the starbase, many of whom are now members of your crew.
-Though the Ariloulaleelay always smile and are never overtly hostile
+Though the Arilou Lalee'lay always smile and are never overtly hostile
 we believe that they have a secret agenda which somehow involves your planet, Earth.
 These secret plans may or may not cause grief and woe to you Earthlings.
 
@@ -916,13 +897,12 @@ which was destroyed by the birth of a Mycon `Deep Child' a century ago.
 
 #(OK_BUY_ALIEN_RACE_16)	melno114.ogg
 When the Ur-Quan entered Gamma Serpentis -- the home star of the Yehat
-their Queen made a sudden change of allegiance and allied with the Ur-Quan Hierarchy
+their Queen made a sudden change of allegiance and allied with the Ur-Quan Hierarchy.
-becoming Ur-Quan combat thralls.
+They became Ur-Quan combat thralls.
 This act was viewed by most Yehat starship officers as ultimately dishonorable
 the desperate act of a corrupt regent to maintain her throne.
-The Yehat shame was greatly magnified by the Shofixti's show of courage
+The Yehat's shame was greatly magnified by the Shofixti's show of courage
 when they destroyed their own star system to slow down the Ur-Quan Armada.
- 
 Captain, you have heard all that we have to say about aliens indigenous to this region.
 Should we learn more in the near future, we shall be certain to sell it to you.
 
@@ -974,7 +954,7 @@ These slow, quiet creatures were silicon-based life forms
 but bore little resemblance to the modern Chenjesu.
 The Taalo were natural immunes to the Dynarri psychic compulsion; they were unaffected by the creatures' power
 and the Dynarri would not permit anyone to exist outside their control
-so they ordered the remaining eleven races of the Milieu to attack and destroy the Taalo home planet.
+so they ordered the remaining races of the Milieu to attack and destroy the Taalo home planet.
 This planet was one of the few Milieu worlds located in this region of space.
 I believe you call their star Delta Vulpeculae. Their home was a moon revolving about the second planet.
 I am sad to say that the Taalo were, indeed, eliminated.
@@ -993,7 +973,7 @@ were ruthlessly burned from the faces of their worlds.
 The agents of this genocide were inevitably the Dynarri's favored pet, the Ur-Quan.
 After almost twenty-five hundred years of unrelenting Dnyarri control
 there were only four living member races of the once-great Sentient Milieu.
-By this point, the Dnyarri had used genetic manipulation to split the Ur-Quan into two sub-species
+By this point, the Dnyarri had used genetic manipulation to split the Ur-Quan into two sub-species:
 the Green Ur-Quan -- scientists, technicians, and administrators
 who were responsible for maintaining the limited infrastructure of the Dnyarri civilization
 and the Black Ur-Quan, who filled the ranks of basic laborer and combat soldier.
@@ -1030,10 +1010,10 @@ The Ur-Quan Slave revolt was won.
 When the last Ur-Quan was free of psychic compulsion -- when the last free Dnyarri was dead
 the combined might of the Ur-Quan star fleets met in orbit above the Dnyarri homeworld.
 They had come together to make two important decisions.
-First -- how to punish the few frightened Dnyarri left below on the planet's surface
+First -- how to punish the few frightened Dnyarri left below on the planet's surface.
 Second -- how to insure that never again would the Ur-Quan be made slaves.
-The first decision was made swiftly. The Dnyarri would not be allowed to die
+The first decision was made swiftly. The Dnyarri would not be allowed to die;
-that was too kind a fate.
+ah, that was too kind a fate.
 Instead, the creatures would be genetically modified into sub-sentience
 they would become dumb animals.
 These low creatures would be further debased by serving the Ur-Quan for all eternity
@@ -1051,8 +1031,8 @@ which required that all other sentient species must become slaves of the Ur-Quan
 or be forever imprisoned beneath an impenetrable force shield.
 Leading the opposition to this plan was Kohr-Ah, a charismatic fleet officer.
 Kohr-Ah proposed a simpler alternative, the `Eternal Doctrine.'
-Simply put, this scheme called for the systematic eradication
+Simply put, this scheme called for the systematic eradication of all sentient life in the universe
-of all sentient life in the universe aside from the Ur-Quan.
+aside from the Ur-Quan.
 Captain, if these positions seem to you extreme or unwarranted
 you must remember that the Ur-Quan had been unwilling slaves for millenia
 and that each of them had to remain in agony for years in order to defeat the Dnyarri.
@@ -1061,21 +1041,19 @@ but neither side would submit, and so they fought a bloody civil war.
 
 #(OK_BUY_HISTORY_9)	melno123.ogg
 This is the last historical item we have for sale.
- 
 The civil war between the Green Ur-Quan, the followers of Kzer-Za
 and their opponents, the death-dealing Kohr-Ah, lasted for decades.
 It is likely that they would have annihilated each other
 were it not for a chance discovery by a Kzer-Za -- a Precursor Battleship!
 The vessel was huge, many times the size of the Ur-Quan's vessels.
 The Precursor ship sliced through the Kohr-Ah forces in days -- the Kohr-Ah were defeated.
-However in their victory, the Kzer-Za were humble
+However, in their victory the Kzer-Za were humble
 they realized that there was a chance that they were wrong, and the Kohr-Ah were right.
 Instead of destroying the Kohr-Ah, the Kzer-Za let them go
 directing them to make their way through the stars, travelling against the spin of the galaxy.
 The Kzer-Za would travel in the opposite direction
-and when the two Ur-Quan forces met, they would fight again in a ritual combat
+and when the two Ur-Quan forces met, they would fight again in ritual combat
 with the Precursor Battleship given to the winner.
- 
 Captain, this is happening here and now.
 The Kzer-Za, the Ur-Quan who enslaved Earth, are fighting their ritual battle against the Kohr-Ah
 in a large area centered near the Crateris constellation.
@@ -1086,7 +1064,7 @@ We believe it is your destiny to prevent this from happening.
 We regret to say that you have exhausted our supply of genuinely valuable information.
 However we DO have many thousands of useless facts and that we will gladly sell you
 at a substantial discount. Are you interested?
-We thought not.
+Hmm, we thought not.
 
 #(buy_new_tech)
 I would like to buy the technology you described.
@@ -1143,16 +1121,17 @@ The technology we are now offering includes plans for building
 improvements to your planet landers which make them resistant to hostile alien lifeforms.
 
 #(NEW_TECH_5)	melno135.ogg
-The technology we are now offering includes blueprints which show how to increase
+The technology we are now offering includes blueprints
-your lander's cargo space to double its present volume.
+which show how to increase your lander's cargo space
+to double its present volume.
 
 #(NEW_TECH_6)	melno136.ogg
 The technology we are now offering includes blueprints which show how to add
 double-capacity fuel tanks.
 
 #(NEW_TECH_7)	melno137.ogg
-The technology we are now offering includes plans for improving
+The technology we are now offering includes plans for improving the rate of fire
-the rate of fire on your lander's stunray bolt-beamer gun.
+on your lander's stunray bolt-beamer gun.
 
 #(NEW_TECH_8)	melno138.ogg
 The technology we are now offering includes details for building
@@ -1185,14 +1164,15 @@ faster than your familiar ion-bolt guns.
 You may wish to compensate for this by building additional dynamo modules for your flagship.
 
 #(OK_BUY_NEW_TECH_2)	melno145.ogg
-Ah yes, speed! An excellent choice for the relentless hunter and craven coward as well.
+Ah yes, speed! An excellent choice for the relentless hunter
+and craven coward as well.
 These modifications are simple enough to be put in place immediately.
 Your landers should be properly equipped in no time.
 
 #(OK_BUY_NEW_TECH_3)	melno146.ogg
 These little babies are great for defense, but because of their limited range
-they may not make a good offensive weapon. However, the more you build for your vessel
+they may not make a good offensive weapon.
-the more damage each laser strike will do.
+However, the more you build for your vessel the more damage each laser strike will do.
 
 #(OK_BUY_NEW_TECH_4)	melno147.ogg
 Our reinforcement procedures on your landers are complete.
@@ -1208,7 +1188,7 @@ which you can fill with other, more useful equipment.
 
 #(OK_BUY_NEW_TECH_7)	melno150.ogg
 After some wild game, hmmm? Well, the changes we made should really make a difference!
-...uh... unless of course that wiring went in backwards
+Unless of course that wiring went in backwards
 in which case you won't be able to shoot at all, or take off for that matter.
 Don't worry, Captain. We stand behind our work. If something goes wrong
 just bring it back to us, and we'll fix it pronto!
@@ -1255,7 +1235,8 @@ We are certain that in the long run, this will prove to be a most profitable inv
 
 #(NEW_TECH_ALL_GONE)	melno158.ogg
 Commander, that is the limit of the new technology we can offer you.
-If I may say so, you have been an excellent customer. Thank you!
+If I may say so, you have been an excellent customer.
+Thank you!
 
 #(we_are_from_alliance0)
 We come in peace, representing 
@@ -1294,7 +1275,7 @@ We will take
  of your Hellbore Cannons
 
 #(TRACKERS)	melno170.ogg
- of your Auto-Tracking modules
+ of your Auto-Tracking Modules
 
 #(DEFENSES)	melno171.ogg
  of your Point-Defense Lasers

sc2/content/comm/orz/orz.txt

@@ -1,8 +1,8 @@
 #(INIT_HELLO)	orz000.ogg
-(MESSAGE FROM TRANSLATION COMPUTER: INCOMING MESSAGE EXTREMELY UNORTHODOX IN COMPOSITION.
+THIS IS A SYSTEM MESSAGE FROM SHIP'S COMPUTER TRANSLATION SUBSYSTEM:
-TRANSLATION INCLUDES MANY LINGUAL BEST-FITS. FOR CLARITY BEST-FITS ARE DENOTED BY ASTERISK PAIRS.
+INCOMING MESSAGE EXTREMELY UNUSUAL IN COMPOSITION.
-OVERALL ACCURACY OF TRANSLATION: UNKNOWN.
+TRANSLATION INCLUDES MANY LINGUAL ANOMALIES.
-(MESSAGE BEGINS...)
+OVERALL ACCURACY OF TRANSLATION IS: UNKNOWN
 
 #(who_you)
 Who are you? What can you tell us about yourselves?
@@ -17,7 +17,7 @@ Okay, right. Uh... maybe you could tell me why you are here.
 
 #(HERE_BECAUSE)	orz002.ogg
 Here is *bright* and *smooth*. The other place is *hurt* Orz too much tired for keeping together.
-Other place is **Frumple**. Orz are here now, but almost not yet.
+Other place is *Frumple*. Orz are here now, but almost not yet.
 Soon Orz are really here! You are help Orz with *parties*.
 Orz looking for you, and find you. So much joy!!
 Now *smooth* place all the time, and after now never going back to outside.
@@ -30,7 +30,7 @@ It is best if many happy Orz are coming to your *house*.
 Let's *spitting* the fun words for several *pieces* and then surprising things!!!
 
 #(ALLIED_HOMEWORLD_HELLO_2)	orz004.ogg
-This is my *house*. Do you want to know a *secret*? Do not *think* it to *not campers*.
+This is my *house*. Do you want to know a *secret*? Do not *think* it is *not campers*.
 You are so many *lonely* *juicy* *bubbles*. It is so sad.
 Now that you are *campers* you will have more *parties*
 and no more *sad* *lonely* *bubbles*.
@@ -113,7 +113,7 @@ I'm afraid I'm still not exactly clear on who you are and where you're from.
 #(ABOUT_US_1)	orz015.ogg
 You are a *silly* *camper*. I am always Orz.
 If I was not Orz, then I would not be, but of course I am Orz.
-We are from *outside*. Also the Arilou *quick babies* are from *outside*.
+We are from the *outside*. Also the Arilou *quick babies* are from *outside*.
 It is the same, but not.
 Orz are from *below*, Arilou are from *above*.
 Orz does not like Arilou. Arilou are too much trouble.
@@ -165,7 +165,7 @@ Androsynth are not here. Orz are here.
 You are not the same too much like Androsynth. You are *happy campers*.
 Do you want to see our surprising *toys*? No!! Do Not!!
 Androsynth are so silly. We do not *tell stories* a lot about them.
-No more Androsynth stories.
+No more Androsynth *stories*.
 
 #(must_know_about_androsyn)
 What happened?? Dammit, what did you do to the Androsynth?!!
@@ -192,7 +192,7 @@ Now please don't take this the wrong way, but what did happen to the Androsynth?
 
 #(FORGET_ANDRO_1)	orz022.ogg
 I am say best word *frumple*. Maybe you do not know.
-*Frumple* be *round* and yet *lumpy*. So bad!!!
+*Frumple* be *round* yet *lumpy*. So bad!!!
 The asking about Androsynth is so *frumple* we are not happy.
 Do not asking it so much.
 It is better to not *frumple* or else there is so much problems.
@@ -203,7 +203,7 @@ Just tell me this. Are we in for the same fate as them?
 
 #(FORGET_ANDRO_2)	orz023.ogg
 You are not same. You are *happy campers*, but already you know.
-I will not talking about *silly Androsynth*, now is stop asking.
+I will not talking about *silly* Androsynth, now is stop asking.
 If you are say the question another time
 it is *frumple* too much and Orz are *dancing* for *dissolving* the *campers*.
 I am clear!!
@@ -234,7 +234,8 @@ Oh well. Now is for *fun time*, not worrying.
 
 #(NEUTRAL_HOMEWORLD_HELLO_4)	orz028.ogg
 Again you have come to my *house*. It is the same time.
-Why are you coming? Do you always the *slow time*? I am surprised!
+Why are you coming? Do you always the *slow time*?
+I am surprised!
 Oh well. Now is for *fun time*, not worrying.
 
 #(NEUTRAL_SPACE_HELLO_1)	orz029.ogg
@@ -294,7 +295,7 @@ We have reconsidered the idea of an alliance between our peoples.
 
 #(OK_TALK_ALLIANCE)	orz037.ogg
 So much the better! Orz have been waiting for *alliance* time.
-I will show you the inside.
+I will show you the *inside*.
 It is so good that you will never leave.
 Oh, I am so excited for expecting *alliance parties*.
 Yes! Yes! Reconsider is best.
@@ -436,7 +437,7 @@ Then *happy days* are here again.
 #(INSULTED_2)	orz051.ogg
 Orz are not *dissolve*! Why is the *silly cow* say Orz are *dissolving*?
 Too much crazy perhaps. You are so sick even for a *party*.
-Again I am *squeezing* the *juice*. Nnnggaaaahhh!!
+Again I am *squeezing the juice*. Nnnggaaaahhh!!
 It does not even helping.
 
 #(INSULTED_3)	orz052.ogg
@@ -508,12 +509,12 @@ Why are you here at this planet?
 This answer is not for *Silly Cows*.
 You do not know Taalo. Taalo are not the *friends*.
 You are coming to the *Playground* and then making words.
-Always you make Orz *squeezing juice*. We do not have enough.
+Always you make Orz *squeezing* the *juice*. We do not have enough.
 I do not want to *smell* you now.
 
 #(FRIENDLY_EXPLANATION)	orz062.ogg
 I will tell. This is Taalo *Playground*. Do you know?
-Taalo is not anymore the *heavy space*. Many *camper* lives they are not here.
+Taalo is not anymore the *heavy space*. They are not here.
 To *play* with Taalo, Orz must *spread* into *Pretty Space*.
 There are so many good places for this here, Orz are happy.
 Of course you do not know Taalo. You are *Campers*.
@@ -575,7 +576,7 @@ What are you busy doing?
 #(BUSY_BECAUSE)	orz068.ogg
 Busy is because Orz have reason. It is secret for *campers*.
 You must going quickly to my *house*.
-It is too bad you cannot **HYUIVBHJHG** there
+It is too bad you cannot *HYUIVBHJHG* there
 but flying the *heavy* ship is okay.
 Perhaps next we will show you our toys. But do not look!!!
 Now you will go to my *house*.